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From Kelsey~ This is a pretty good paragraph but I don’t think that you don’t need to say this case was as simple as black and white at the end okay. Thanks Kelsey from Brian .
From Lukas: This is pretty good, but it has some bad spelling and the statement that the jury to let statement does not make any sense thank you for your time.
From Mr. Davis: I don’t see any direct evidence. Make sure it is set off in quotes. Also, I don’t see much connectivity between your first and last sentences.
From !~*Candice*!~:
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You probably need to put a few more examples into your paragraph, and you need to have a clincher that ties everything up. Also, it's not Macomb, it is Maycomb.
hey brian what is up to fix my mistake in the last comment lol it needs some work on your grammer
BRIAN!!!!!
Wow I love your paragraph....It totally makes sense and you stick to the subject..O I can't forget that you did a very fantastic Job!!!! YOU WILL NEVER GUESS WHO IS ASKING YOU. YOU WILL HAVE TO WAIT AND SEE...HEHEHEH..I LOVE YOU HUN...HEHEHHEHEHEHEHEHE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!HOLLA MAN!!!!!!!!!!!
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Yeah I think you could use a few more examples and put in some direct evidence but other than that it was great.
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